Tuesday, September 15, 2009

Mark Fox Project 1

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  1. StriderSeptember 15, 2009 at 4:22 PM

    The first thing that I noticed was how beautiful the background choice is. The mountain range is without a doubt breathtaking. A few strong compositional elements I noticed were; the line that is created by the sword, then the eye fall straight to the hand pushing you up back into the other three objects, then the eye continues into the background. The items in the hand are all very different tones and therefore stand apart from each other but not from the entire work.

    One element that I believe should be improved upon is the images all feel like they were slapped on. The best evidence of any of these images fitting together is the sensei on the end of the wakizashi hilt. I can see that either blending mode or a filter, but I am pretty sure a filter, was used on the hand which makes it stand out more than cover it up. I am also not sure what the three objects represent past the literal ipod, smokes, and phone would be considered for.

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  2. TEFairesSeptember 15, 2009 at 4:38 PM

    Your piece has a nice, clear, diagonal composition. The elements (sword, phone, cigarettes, and ipod) are clearly in place to describe the things that are both important and integral in your life. The mountain scene serves as the backdrop and the negative space in your image, and this works well. It gives the entire piece a sense of tranquility. I also like what you did with the figure at the end of the katana; it is visually compelling.
    On the flip side, the hand’s red tint I feel is unnecessary and a little too sharp in contrast with the subtle browns, blues and whites in the background. Perhaps the natural color with adjusted levels, or a different subtler tint would be in the images’ favor. I also feel the sword and figure upon could also be a bit larger to eliminate the negative space. I would also find it interesting to see the hand and objects within come into the page from a different angle.

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  3. SarahSeptember 15, 2009 at 4:47 PM

    okay, the first thing i notice is the bright red hand then the mountain range. I like the coloring done on the hand itself, it is very nice. The masking of the images are also very nice, i'm sure taking some time.


    I do have to say everything looks slapped on there, agreeing with strider, but i do know that you are VERY new to photoshop. There isn't any blending at all here, so it doesn't really bring all your images together as a whole. Some of the images themselves don't really go well together. I think you thought a little to hard for this project. The best fitting together of all these images is you on the hilt of the sword.
    I understand the ipod, the smokes and the phone, because you told me thoughts for the project.
    Needs a little work, but i think you'll do better over time when you leran photoshop a lil more.

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  4. TylerSeptember 17, 2009 at 2:26 AM

    Very crisp, clear piece. Each image in it seems to have been well cut out without jagged edges / leftovers / cuts out of them that stand out or draw the eye any. I like the solitude of the man on the hilt above all the mountains which are so far away, it seems like it's for part of the training and some kind of symbolism about training the mind / getting the correct mental state for the martial art he is in. I assume the items in the lower right are to be distractions that would deter one's training / mental focus / physical state of being.

    Under the assumption that the items in the lower right are to be negatives towards the goal of the martial artist, I assume the red tint given to the hand is to also show that it's a bad thing. I think without it I'd still figure it out, but the color more quickly made me say: "I wonder if this is supposed to be saying something bad about what the hand is holding?" I kind of feel like the brighter parts of the hand seem like they need to be a bit darker, as the rest of it goes into a dark red, then the flash area and stretched parts seem really white and not affected by the red very much. Though maybe more red would be bad, as it would make the hand stand out a whole lot more.

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